Critic #1: Fion
I like the color encoding for the first version, but the spacing between the graphic element and the numbers should be smaller so that the numbers is the same size as the graphic element to get rid of the white space. For the second version, you probably want to put a label on the x-axis because you put one on the y-axis. The spacing for the left label is also a bit too close.
I got rid of the empty space in the graphic by changing the dimensions of the graphic to be 3 by 9 instead of 5 by 6 with some data missing so that the numbers could also look proportionate next to the model.
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Critic #2: Cindy
Your color model and typography model looks really good. I like the way you emphasized the numbers and had the description below in your first example. At a glance, your first display had the bomb graphics, which I wasn’t sure what it was until I read through the captions. Assuming that you want to display how many bombs were successful, active, or failed to detonate, I think the first visual is better since the bar graph did not depict what you wanted to say since the numbers are too similar to each other and that you’re not comparing competitors but showing the number of bombs. Your first visual, maybe try aligning it differently, since you are displaying 3 different numbers, having all together does not make the most logical sense. Else, good work!
Cindy suggested making the numbers into 3 different ones, so I separated the 3 data into their own number encoding and put the numbers next to each model in order to more easily depict the data that I want to show with the colors
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Critic #3: Andre
Emulation feedback: I think that since you have 27 bombs, try alinging the bombs differently so it would all even out; perhaps 3 rows of 9 bombs? Maybe add somewhere that 270 million bombs were dropped? I dont know why but adding 81 + 109 + 80 is not easy for me lol. Also, I don't know if your visual model would allow, but adding some context in what you are trying to display might be helpful to the users. At first when looking at the model I just see that a lot of bombs were dropped. Plus, do you need the .0 at the end of your numbers? How precise are you trying to be?
Andre suggested changing up the dimensions of my number encoding so I tried making it all inline without white space. I also removed the decimal points to see if it still fits, but mainly changed because my numbers aren't very precise, so round numbers work a lot better.
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Critic #1: Fred
I like the look of the second version being separated. But maybe experimenting with the numbers, or number crunching so that the numbers create more of an impact. Having a description or legend about the statistics definitely, help. Then after doing like 1 out of 3 bombs as statistics, make the image reflect that.
I kept the second version but decided not to do number crunching because I wanted to show the impact of large amounts rather than factional labeled statistics. I also added a description below the subheader rather than a legend because a description follows my visual model more than a legend to describe my statistics.
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Critic #2: Andre
I like that you separated all of them, but the numbers kinda need to be aligned, like the 109 with its text. The text on your visual model also doesn't have color below the big numbers so taking those out and making them a regular text. Also making the header line a little bigger. The color on the bombs are also hard to distinguish from the black and the grey.
I re-aligned the numbers with the text so that they are all evenly left aligned. I fixed the colored text below that statistic numbers because they should not have a color fill and I changed the color for one of the bombs because the gray was sometimes tough to distinguish from the black, so instead, I used a different gradient of the red from my color model.
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Second Number Element & Critiques
Critic #3: Fion
I don't feel like the numbers are in order from where I'm reading, having the numbers go from high to low makes more sense than to jump around from high to low back to high. Maybe try putting the text on the left because it helps when people look and read your visual, they will see the text and read what it says then they will be able to understand the isotype more.
I ordered the numbers from lowest on top to highest on the bottom because it did seem to make more sense to be in order. I also took Fion's critique and tried to make the statistics on the left, and I feel like it worked out pretty well because that is how people would be reading it from left to right.
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This display shows statistics for all 270 million bombs that were dropped during the secret war: the number of bombs that were successfully used and exploded properly, the number of bombs that were used that are still active on the ground, and the number of bombs that completely failed to detonate.
How this element exploits the visual potential of numbers: This element exploits the visual potential of numbers by using colors to distinguish the different types of data being shown, and size for the bar graph to show the different impacts of the affected bombs, and big numbers and color encoding to correspond with the graphs.
How this element emulates the models:
To emulate my color model I used the red, black and gray to display different data types and is used to emphasize the numbers used for the data.
To emulate my visual language model I used the same big number to smaller text like how my model using text next to the pie chart.
To emulate my typography model I used the default illustrator font Myriad Pro because it using the same types of serifs and is thick.
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Credits/Sources: http://www.nra.gov.la/uxoproblem.html
