Critic #1: brooks
I like the first model on the right, it looks great and works with the numbers. But the second pie chart doesn't do much justice because it doesn't seem to show the impact that it should with those numbers. maybe using a people's graph and highlighting them to show different statistic would do better. The seccond graph works well with the type of numbers you're trying to display, I like that better than the other pie chart,but overall, the first pie chart with the two text works well.
I took Brooks critique into consideration about the numbers not being used for the right purposes in a pie chart, so I decided to stick with the first version and emphasize the two numbers that I am trying to display.
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Critic #2: Andre
I like the look of it, looks just like your model, but the numbers don't make sense to me. For some reason, I keep seeing 61 thousand instead of 50,000 as a total. Maybe making your colors overlap to show that it is over a total of 50,000 instead. The second model I like. It's a bit plain but it works with your data. There also needs to be a title for it.
Andre didn't think that the numbers made much sense with the pie chart that I made, so to fix this sort of confusion, I made the numbers equal up to the total, rather than making one number the total, and the other piece of the pie chart compare itself to the total. That way, the numbers are more distinct, and it looks like you have to add it up.
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Critic #3: Fion
The first one, the numbers don't make sense. I don't exactly see that one thing is 100% while those are other proportions. I see them as an added sum. The text looks a bit too squished. I really like the other pie chart, it works well with my model and my data. For the colors, you could use other gradients of red instead of use the gray colors. The numbers on the y-axis could also be reduced to be proportionate with the x-axis.
Fion had similar suggestions as Andre with the pie charts, making them look to add up to a certain number, I manipulated the data in order to really show the data I wanted. I also ended up not using the second model with the bar graphs because I saw the first model as a better fit.
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Critic #1: Cindy
From your last model, this new one definitely makes more sense. I definitely see that the black means 38.5 and the red is 11.5 rather than 50 overall, so it looks great. I don't know what UXO is but I'm assuming you described that in your infographic somewhere.
I didn't really make any changes to my numbers encoding, it followed my models well and made a lot more sense in terms of the numbers adding up now.
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Critic #2: Kito
Emulation feedback: Design looks spot on, itsUXO is confusing it's not covered in other parts of your infograph. I'm not sure if i'm a fan of the numbers on top of each other, try to make them horizontal to each other since the design is really tall. Try to play around with the stroke of the white line between the pie slices, your visual model is little bit thick maybe?
I took Kito's critique into consideration about making my design more horizontal, but decided to keep it the same because I plan to make my layout vertical, and this encoding follows my model really well.
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First Number Element & Critiques
Critic #3: Andre
i like the new model, makes more sense than the last one. I think you emulated the visual model quite well; you have the text and boldness of it the correct weight. Id prefer if you had the number to the side of pie slice so it would be more intuitive but the model doesn't do that so oh well. Since it is a pie chart it looks like it is out of 50 instead of 38.5. Overall, I think you did a very good job.
I took Andre's critique into consideration about making my design more horizontal, but decided to keep it the same as well because I plan to make my layout vertical, and this encoding follows my model really well.
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This shows the number of human casualties caused by unexploded ordinances, from the bombs that were dropped on Laos. The number displays the number of all victims as well as how many of those victims were children. Another graph shows the total number of bombs dropped. From those, the graph also shows the number of bombs that failed to detonate, and the number of bombs that are still live and have the possibility to detonate.
How this element exploits the visual potential of numbers: This pie chart uses size to convey the proportion of total number and distribution of its effects to show how much. The numbers to the side show exactly how many victims were affected as well as the number of bombs dropped.
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How this element emulates the models:
To emulate my color model I used the red color scheme for the small numbers along with the lesser number for the text also being red to show a connection, as well as the larger number being in black, with part of the pie also being black.
To emulate my visual language model I used a pie chart with slightly separated pieces. with text below the pie chart giving a short number's description to give details about the pie chart.
To emulate my typography model I mainly used Illustrator's default of Myriad Pro to emulated the thicker fonts of the numbers.
Credits/Sources: http://www.nra.gov.la/uxoproblem.html
